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« on: September 08, 2006, 11:50:09 pm »
NO IT NOT THE
spy novel  i'm writing, Nor
the Life story of me,
or the leaflet of all thoses other great works I;m doing

ever Remember Dangemouse, I have writing a story
(half way finshed) it got 4-5 part I have part 1, 2 finsh)
would you like ot read the?

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« Reply #1 on: September 08, 2006, 11:54:09 pm »

What's it about... it's not the Bible is it?


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« Reply #2 on: September 08, 2006, 11:54:58 pm »
GREAT SCOTS NO!

Here it is PART1:



Narrator: (as the camera mover across the skyline of London)
London, home of Notting hill, Bus depot, the
wellsdin Green, sleeping association of Car drivers, Inverness hunting club of
Inverness Scotland.  And Home to Danger mouse, the world greatest
secret agent, and Penfold, the most likely person to be found in a humbug sweet
shop during the January sales!



 



Then the scene just and hover just outside
Danger mouse letter box home)



 



Narrator: honestly theses Scripts are getting
worse, you know I missed out on beening the Narrator for
National Lottery program,
oh He well respect, but No I have to put up
with this Low class rubbish, with No chance of getting a job even on that
Shopping channel.  (Suddenly the phone
rings, and the Narrator answers it, and then
mumbling starts on the other end of the line)



Well, I know sir, no sir, of course not
sir, I love them sir, 



(Then the phone drop onto the reverser)



Narrator: can I just
say that these Scripts are billeted, absolutely wonderfully, and this Show goes
form strange to strange each week!



(Then scene starts up
again and appear in DM Lough area)



Penfold: Chief, Chief



DM: why are you saying
chief?



Penfold, er well I
trying to say chief, but I mind got Pre- occupied



DM with what,



Penfoldl: I can’t
remember



Before DM can say
another word the Alarm went off and both turn to see Conel K, pushing more
blasted button,



 



K: Miss belfree where
me tea, and biscuits,



DM I’m not miss belfree,
but where has got to?



K ; ah it a bank holiday,
everyone is off today, apart me and You



Penfold: Oh goodie I
got the day off right! No super villains, or even save the world DM: penfold
SHUSS!



Pen: but DM I got the
day



DM PENfold You haven’t



Pen: but conel K said



DM ARRGH<



Pen:  you don’t have to get bad tempted do you



Connel K: where my
tea,



DM: I’m not miss
bellfree, you said ever one has the day off,



K: Really dm I never
know that, well I think I go have visit the test match day



DM: no sir you said
everyone else has the day of bar me and you and penfold



Pen: he never said my
name



DM penfold SHUSS!



DM anyway what did you
want sir anyways



K: I want my tea with
two sugars and milk and some ginger nuts as it Tuesday



DM: really sir it
Mon…never mind, what is the trouble is the world in danger again



K: well, where those
paper, yes it is, not really but, there some fisha going on over in Europe, money doing funny tricks, people keep saying that
there money keeps changing value!



DM: are you sure, it needs
our attention? You know what people are like with money, especial when there
slightly drunk



Penfold: I remember
what you were like at the Xmas parlty Last year



DM :I thourgh I told
you never to bring that back up again,



K: not really but you
are the only one, that aren’t on holiday today



DM: right then, were
on away to Germany



 



(Then the scene goes
fuzzy and pulls back, into
Professor P Crumhorn
office, with him laughing behide his large disk, with his office still
Cluttered with paperwork and broken machine parts everywhere)



Crumhorn: Fools there think there can
Defeat me Professor P Crumhorn, those fool will never figure out what my plan
is, there never be able to see the greatness of this ingénues masterful, great
work I Professor P crumhorn



 



 



With my machine I will change every single
Euro note, so I can collect all the low value one’s, and when I control them
all I will switch off my machine, and I will be the richest person in Europe!
And no one will be able to stop me! And with all the confusing everyone is
getting while the money changes value I will take control!



 



Narrator: Can Dm, and penfold stop crumhorn
masterful plan, or will there  get Short
change in the process, and will Crumhorn releases he a buck in stead of cent,



And will Penfold.. N ow really I have to
put my foot down this time! These Scripts are dreadful! And you call this a
cliff hanger! Now really (phone rings again) more mumbling



Fired! You can’t Fire me I Won the 1985 junior
showcase in Southampton, for my great acting.
You can’t who can, and who would replace me (music fades in)






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« Reply #3 on: September 09, 2006, 08:51:27 am »
Well, they're better than Bounty's stories, I can tell you that!
Old but spicey!

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« Reply #5 on: September 09, 2006, 03:58:37 pm »
Anything is better than bounty's stories. loulou38969.6242592593
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« Reply #6 on: September 09, 2006, 07:40:35 pm »
Poo in your mouth? 

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« Reply #7 on: September 09, 2006, 07:56:02 pm »
BUT what about my story? 

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« Reply #8 on: September 10, 2006, 03:28:50 pm »
 NO2:

(The scene, is DM and penfold in the Mk3 driving over the English channel)

Narrator: Last we left Dangermouse, and penfold, the two where of to
Germany to save the world again, And I had been fired, because of there
appalling scripts! But there won’t get rid of me that easily! I have
blocked myself in the office, so there going to have to storm this
room.
 
Pen: But colen K never said I was working today
DM: JUST LEAVE IT PENFOLD!
Pen, BUT
DM: do you know I really do wonder why I brother sometimes.
Pen: no DM I don’t know you thunder, is it nice?
DM: thunder, GOOD grief!
Pen: If you did where the lighting?
Dm, eyes rollback as the scene move to a France shop,)
Narrator: the whole of Europe is in chaos as shop keeper and customer complain that the value of the notes aren’t valued

( there a scene of a France shop keeper, in a stipend blue and white
jumper, and a load of garlic around him and a annoyed looking customer
speaking France and waving her hands then Hitting him over the head
with the French Stick)
Narrator: as the customer refused to hand
over more money, as there think the casher an stealing the money right
in front of there eyes
( In a Italian supermarket, a another
customer hand over 50 Euros to the checkout lady, and then suddenly it
change it a 5 euro note, then the customer look at the casher and think
she has swaps it and start complaining to Her)
Narrator: these scene are repeated all over Europe as the EU grinds to a halt as customer and cashier complain at each other
 
(DM lands the Mk3 outside the Germany Main bank, and both run out into the offices)
 
Pen: where are going chief?
DM to look at the banks money of course
Pen: but it a bank holiday today,
DM: Yes penfold but this is Germany so there bank are open,
Pen: but

DM: right we know the English will never hold there holiday on the same
day as the Europe so, if English banks are closed then the banks here
must be open
Pen: wooo
 
( dm and Penfold ) walk inside the bank to look at the money the banks had left out for them to look at,
 
Pen: Dm, what happen to the Germany spoken bank manger?
DM: will penfold we couldn’t afford one, nor the subtitles
pen: will I never spent the money on those humbug I swear!
DM: no one siad yuo did, what humbugs
Pen: er nothing chief,!
 
 
( penfold pick up a 10 Euro note, of the table while DM investigate the other notes)
Pen: oh crums look at that my note just change value,
DM: how strange,
Pen: I wanted to buy some lemon drops with that,
DM: I buy you some when we get back, just stay sssh until I can see what on this note, there a tiny microchip on this note,
Pen: how lucky I staving I can I get some,
DM: get what?
Pen: Mico chips, but there have to be hot!
DM, I never said Micro-chips I said Microchips, the chips from computers!
Pen: but you did, and I was so looking forward to having some:
DM: just ssshus, I just use my superior hearing to hear the electronic sound wave, and it coming form English Channel,
(dm and penfold run into the mk3, once again penfold fall into the seat, and the fly off across Germany and France)
DM: I bet it Greenback with another diabolical scheme
Pen: te-hehe, you’re wrong
DM; well, what do you mean wrong
Pen: you are
DM: what do you mean?
Pen: you’re wrong
DM: well then it must be Alien friend form plant..
Pen: still wrong Te he he
DM: so just who is it then?
Pen; Crum horn
DM: CRUMHORN, and how do you know this, what facts have you got to prove it him?
Pen: I read the script!
DM: you read the scripts/ you read the scripts, well at least one of us is informed!
 
(DM lands the MK3 on the channel island golf course, next to a very powerful machine sitting next to 12th Hole)
 
Pen: oh look a Golf club,
Dm: not now Penfold
Pen; but chief just one game please
DM: not now, I’m trying to figure out how this works:
(crumhorn appears out of now where, Penfold suddenly hides be hide dm legs saying “oh heck”)
DM: a Crum horn you never get away with this evil pl…. what is you evil plan?

Crum: your fools I know you could never work it out, as I Professor P
Crumhorn, super genies has Out smart the world greatest superhero,
Pen: here we go with his over head ego!
Crum: How dare you say that about ME Professor P Crumhorn. I think you need a some new bill of Health
(Out of Now where a large sack of Euro Note started falling to wards them, at a lighten speed)
Pen: Oh hick, Oh crumbs, HELP HELP (penfold start running in circles)
 
Narrator: Well DM and Penfold survive the biggest Free Gift there every had?

Will there be able to spend there way out of this situation, And will
Penfold ever get the chance to pot a birdie instead of potting the a
hole in the ground? And will the management ever get me out of this
studio office; you have to turn to our Next amazing episode of Danger
mouse (Music feeds in)

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« Reply #9 on: September 10, 2006, 03:30:37 pm »
I think I'm just a little too old for Dangermouse. Just a tad mind.
Old but spicey!

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« Reply #10 on: September 10, 2006, 03:32:56 pm »
I ;m trying out my writing skills, - cartoon area, hopely next time it wil be murder Msytral

but at least you give it the


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« Reply #11 on: September 10, 2006, 03:40:17 pm »
A bit like Midsomer Murders or something more gritty?

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« Reply #12 on: September 10, 2006, 03:52:42 pm »
hlaf between that and Rebus! 

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« Reply #13 on: September 10, 2006, 05:47:09 pm »
More Inspector Linley then, he is so brooding!